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-- KM
Show Preview
There's a little button named "Show preview" next to the "Save page" button that allows you to view the changes you made without saving. It is recommended to use this button instead of making one small edit, saving, making another edit, saving, and so on. -- RevengeX Palpatine 12:05, 2 June 2007 (MDT)
Continuity
Certain parts of the page contradict each other. At one point, it mentions you being made a Flight Leader and resigning before the CSP House Feud, then resigning again afterwards. Were you re-appointed, or is one of these wrong? You also have your master, Impetus, being part of the jury that convicted you on murder charges, but have written her as questioning you once you returned to your House.
Also, as far as that case goes, I think you should perhaps change the circumstances or the events altogether; execution would be the punishment for murder and treason - "banishment for several months" is an almost laughable punishment. - Xayun, 06/06/07
In one part you have what's basically "Cethgus got injured during the war and therefore wasn't involved that much", then you start an unrelated part, then suddenly finish that and go on to describe how Cethgus got injured during the war. Notice anything wrong? - Xayun, 09/09/07
Warbanners
If you are going to include your warbanner on your character article, please write at least a paragraph about it. -- RevengeX Palpatine 12:57, 11 June 2008 (MDT)