When were you born?
730 BBY? Just out of curiosity do you understand the Star Wars timeline? Your history and that date don't match up, actually they conflict. For us it is currently 29 ABY (29 years After the Battle of Yavin). Would you like to correct your age, please? --Tron 13:52, 1 May 2008 (MDT)
Corrections Needed
Greetings Sev, I have a few questions about your Wiki and your bio. With these questions, I by no means mean to insult you in any way or your creative skill, more so I either need clarification or merely corrections:
1. You say you were born in 10 BBY, but the Jedi took you to the Jedi Temple? The Jedi Temple was destroyed in 19 BBY, 9 years before you were able to be a Jedi.
2. So you and your Master go to Dantooine and find dark side caves. You get corrupted by the caves. And your Master lets you go? How did you know where to find the Sith teachings? How did you escape a Master when you are only a Padawan? And when did Jedi Masters bring their students on trust exercises?
3. How could a Jedi Master not know the extent of how dark sided you were?
4. So you couldn’t build a Lightsaber, and you fought your Master, survived, and for three days escaped him? Then on the fourth day you killed him in your sleep? You’re an apprentice, right?
5. “He wasn’t known in the criminal underworld as much as Jango Fett.” Jango Fett died before the Clone Wars started.
6. Hoth had an Imperial Corrections spot established on it. I don’t think you could’ve merely bypassed it and landed on the surface, come across some random Snowtroopers, fight for a day and a half, and then leave.
Basically I like the ideas that you brought forth, but some of the stuff in your profile is just too contradictory. I suggest looking at the Star Wars time-line before the rewrites take place. Also, if you want your story to make more sense, change your Birthday to before Episode 1. Thanks :)
Scyrone 20:50, 11 December 2009 (UTC)