Krandon, it would be a good idea for you to check out some of the other wiki pages to give yourself some ideas on what to do. Also, a few DB canon issues - first of which is the fact that the current DB year is 28 ABY. Depending how old you want your character, you should choose some time 15+ years before that. 78 ABY is a long ways away.
Another thing is your dossier has you named Krandon, but on the page you list a different name and give yourself a last name... it's a bit confusing. If you're trying to show that you gave yourself a "Dark Jedi" name, maybe clarify that in your history. When you're writing, try to stick to one tense. If your history is in third-person, keep the rest of your page (Achievements and Trivia) the same. So more "He, Krandon, the Obelisk", etc rather than "I and me". Hope that helps. --Shadow Taldrya 16:05, 5 March 2008 (MST)