Quality
This page reads more like a story than a proper fictional recounting of events. Articles about characters should be written objectively from the third person perspective and should not include things like dialogue and the character's thoughts. For an example of a properly written character page, please see Muz Ashen's history. If you need any help, feel free to leave a message after this edit. --Shadow Taldrya 23:59, 6 July 2011 (UTC)